Judgment Angel Zero
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« on: January 28, 2008, 02:55:26 pm » |
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Clash in Court (Phoenix Wright Crossover)
Episode 1: Turnabout Premier
(June 12th, District Court House, Defendant Lobby)
Judgment: Ok Cads, this is it...The day of your trial.
Cads: Yeah I guess so...I'm getting chills.
Judgment: Y'know...I'm a little nervous myself....
Cads: WHAT!?!?!? NO! Be confident, I don't need your need to be emo put me in prison!
Judgment: But...This is my first case....I have a right to be nervous! >8U
Cads: Y-Your first case? WHY DIDN'T YOU TELL ME!?
Judgment: ....
Cads: Look, Judg, your my friend. I have confidence in you...
Judgment: Th-Thanks.
Bailiff: The defense may now proceed to the coutroom.
Judgment: Well, here goes nothing.
Cads: *shudders nervously*
(June 12th, District Courtroom #3)
Judge: *bangs gavel* Court is now in session.
Doc: The prosecution is ready, your honor...
Judg: (Yikes! I've gotta go against THE Thunderbird!?) T-The defense is ready....
Judge: Mr.Judgment, you will refer to me as "Your Honor" or I will throw my gavel at you.
Judg: What!?
Judge: *assumes gavel throwing position*
Judg: I mean, yes your honor!
Judge: Than the prosecution may begin it's opening statement.
Doc: Gladly. Two days ago, the victim, Pefuskat, was murdered by the defendant, Cads. Today, we will prove this with decisive evidence, and a decisive witness.
Judge: Decisive evidence? Oh my! What a rare occurence!
Judg: ....
Doc: I now call my first witness to the stand, Detective D.Max.
*Dmax walks up to the witness stand*
Doc: Now than witness, please state your name and occupation.
Dmax: D.Max. I'm a detective, but you already told them tha-
OBJECTION!
Doc: *slaps palm onto desk* You will follow court procedure without complaints!
Judg: (Wut?)
D.Max: Whatever.... Douche...
Doc: I'm going to pretend I didn't hear that for your sake...Now then...What was the cause of death?
D.Max: The victim was stabbed in the heart with this knife.
(Knife presented as evidence) (Autopsy Report Presented as evidence)
Doc: And this took place at?
D.Max: 6:00 pm, the defendant's house...
Doc: I see. Please testify about the evidence found at the crime scene.
Dmax: Ok...
WITNESS TESTIMONY/CROSS EXAMINATION Decisive Evid-
HOLD IT!!!
Judg: Uhh...What am I supposed to do again?
Doc: *facedesk*
Judge: Did you even graduate from Law School, Mr.Judgment?
Judg: Yeah....I just.....This is my first case and I'm kind of nervous...
Doc: I will explain to this idiot. During a Cross Examination, you will listen to a witness's testimony and try to pick out any little details that may contradict the evidence. When you find a contradiction, you jam your finger in the witness's face and yell "Objection" as loudly as you can. As so:
OBJECTION!!!!!
Doc: *jams his finger in DMax's face*
DMax: Aww, come on! Your fingers smell like ass!
Doc: *sniffs fingers and puts them away* ..............This is when you present your evidence.
Judg: I think I've got it.
Judge: Than Continue the testimony.
WITNESS TESTIMONY/CROSS EXAMINATION Desicive Evidence:
Dmax: -So by the time we got to the scene of the crime, the victim was dead.
HOLD IT
Judg: How did you know he was dead?!
DMax: Are you serious!?
Judg: Deadly!
DMax: The guy had a frickin knfe in his frickin heart!
Judg: Good Point.
Dmax: -As I've stated earlier, there was a knife, sticking out from the chest of the victim.
HOLD IT!
Judg: So the victim was stabbed?
Dmax: Moving on. >_>
Dmax: -Only the victim's fingerprints were found on the knife however. It's obviously the victims Knife.
HOLD-
Dmax: You'd better not say something stupid!
Judg: Actually, I was going to ask how you came to the conclusion that Cads did it, if there were his prints were on the knife...
Dmax: Oh. I was getting to that... -On some of the blood near the victim, Cads's shoe prints were found. He left a clear trail around the house. (Bloody Foot Print submitted as evidence)
HOLD IT!
Judg: Th-
Doc: Are you going to say hold it after EVERY statement?
Judg: Maybe...
Doc: Only scrubs badger their witness. D.Max, please go on.
Dmax: Lol
Dmax: -We also found a photo on the victim's cell phone, taken close to the time of the murder.
(Present's photo as evidence)
(Photo Description: Cads hanging out in Pefuskat's living room.)
Judge: My my, this is most certainly solid evidence. He was at the crime scene during the time of the crime...And he left foot prints with the victim's blood all over the place...
OBJECTION!
Judg: That doesn't explain the knife however!
Judge: Hmmm....?
Dmax: The defendant was wearing gloves, duh.
Judg: Wrong. Look at this photo....Cads is clearly NOT wearing gloves. How can there NOT be finger prints if Cads was not wearing gloves?
Judge: HM! Your right!
Doc: Unfortunately, wrong.
Judg: What?
Doc: There's more.
Dmax: Yeah.
Dmax: -Before the victim died, he managed to write "C" in blood on the floor.
-We also found some bloody gloves sitting on the table...With Cads's prints on them....
("C" and Gloves submitted as evidence)
END TESTIMONY
Doc: With so much evidence, it would be hard to get Cads to look any more guilty. But I have with my, a witnessed, who was also at the house at the time of the murder.
Judg: WHAT!?
Judge: I say, I would love to hear from this man. We shall take a 10 minute reccess and hear from the witness.
(End Part 1)
Mot the greatest....But it's my first time writing murder mysteries and what not. The case will be wishy washy...But I'm hoping the comedy will make up for it.........I'll have the whole "Murder Mystery" thing down by episode 2. Don't worry. Episode 1 is more like a test run than anything...
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« Reply #1 on: January 28, 2008, 02:59:58 pm » |
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Doc: k, i'll be waiting for u... *puts on the serious face* ..hmmm...theres an idea...
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« Reply #2 on: January 28, 2008, 03:09:54 pm » |
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*Looks forward*
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Dark Days Are Coming.This Message Has Been Intercepted. You Have Been Mislead. There Is No Conspiracy.
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« Reply #4 on: January 28, 2008, 05:33:58 pm » |
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Hah! Exactly like the game! I love it.
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Judgment Angel Zero
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« Reply #5 on: January 28, 2008, 05:45:34 pm » |
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Hah! Exactly like the game! I love it.
Was there ever an instance where you thought I was trying way too hard to be funny?
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« Reply #6 on: January 28, 2008, 05:46:49 pm » |
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Hah! Exactly like the game! I love it.
Was there ever an instance where you thought I was trying way too hard to be funny? None that really stuck out when I read through it.
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Judgment Angel Zero
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« Reply #7 on: January 28, 2008, 07:50:48 pm » |
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So NO ONE else read my story, and has anything to say? Do you know how dissappointing it is for a writer to write something, only to have it ignored?
Fine. Gaffit, because no one else has anything to say, you must write a 5 paragraph review of my story to compensate for those wrong doers.
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« Reply #8 on: January 28, 2008, 08:46:29 pm » |
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i like it.
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« Reply #9 on: January 28, 2008, 08:49:09 pm » |
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*shrugs* Doc: not a fan of the game so my opinion is kinda irrelevant...
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Judgment Angel Zero
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« Reply #10 on: January 28, 2008, 08:49:47 pm » |
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i like it.
Anything that needs improvement, or anything special you like? It's all to help improve the story...
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« Reply #11 on: January 28, 2008, 08:53:52 pm » |
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i like it.
Anything that needs improvement, or anything special you like? It's all to help improve the story... idk, i think ur makeing doc a lil more aggressive then he actually acts, but it fits they layout well so no real complaints
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Judgment Angel Zero
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« Reply #12 on: January 28, 2008, 08:57:08 pm » |
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i like it.
Anything that needs improvement, or anything special you like? It's all to help improve the story... idk, i think ur makeing doc a lil more aggressive then he actually acts, but it fits they layout well so no real complaints Exaggerating a personality is key for a story like this. As you can see, it fits quite well.
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« Reply #13 on: January 28, 2008, 08:58:51 pm » |
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i like it.
Anything that needs improvement, or anything special you like? It's all to help improve the story... idk, i think ur makeing doc a lil more aggressive then he actually acts, but it fits they layout well so no real complaints Exaggerating a personality is key for a story like this. As you can see, it fits quite well. yea thats why i said that it fits the story lol
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Judgment Angel Zero
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« Reply #14 on: January 28, 2008, 09:04:35 pm » |
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i like it.
Anything that needs improvement, or anything special you like? It's all to help improve the story... idk, i think ur makeing doc a lil more aggressive then he actually acts, but it fits they layout well so no real complaints Exaggerating a personality is key for a story like this. As you can see, it fits quite well. yea thats why i said that it fits the story lol t('_'t)
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